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The Locked Door by ~xcarebearx:iconxcarebearx:





The small chimes and rings
from the piano.
Slowly walking alone,
down the hallway,
sounds grow louder.

Laughing and yelling
get quieter as I approach the door,
the ringing chimes
cut off everyone and everything
I left behind.

Opening the door,
The room now turns silent.
The white paint,
begins to chip and crack.
No more windows of sunlight.
Not a soul knows who I am.

The piano starts to play
once again.
The people I once knew,
stand outside the door,
scratching and clawing,
screaming to get in.
The door I locked will never be opened,
My door is sealed to the world.

Walls stand between you and me.
Tears stand between the eyes
I once adored.
Trust is the key to my door,
not even you who once opened it,
will ever see the sunlight
that once made me smile.
©2003-2008 ~xcarebearx
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Submitted: Jan 24, 2003
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Well, yes this still needs work, And I actually think I will try to rewrite this sometime.

Actually the point of this was, someone told me that I keep a wall infront of myself and the world around me....I look in and help...but I never look back at myself. I keep things inside me, and then maybe if someone gets through the door, I open up


Trust



the walls around me stand so still, I look inside, so quiet...I want to stay there forever. No one will ever get in and bother me again......

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~black-r0se:iconblack-r0se: Jan 24, 2003, 11:52:18 AM
beautiful... yet very sad Hug

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My rhymes are the shit.
~doomit:icondoomit: Jan 24, 2003, 11:56:36 AM
i have to regret ever making the wall for myself
now I see the troubled fate has entered your life
beyond the door, beyond the walls and all the reasons
there's life. However bad, however good. It is.

-doomit

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I AM NOT IN CONTROL!

-Doomit
~traumachamber:icontraumachamber: Jan 24, 2003, 12:15:52 PM
Very good, but really sad too. I know how easy it is to put up walls... in keeping with your metaphor, don't try to just suddenly one day break down the wall, cause it'll be rebuilt before you know it... just slowly chip away at it, and put a nice window in there, so you can see out, but people can still see you. And then, once comfortable, take that wall away, and let everyone in on your little secret, yourself. Believe me, sometimes friends grow closer once they take a peek behind the wall. Good luck, and excellent work here. :) (Smile)

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"It's in my hands, the sky...
So bright, it's burning.
It's for me to decide.
WITH FLAMES,
WE REACH HEAVEN TONIGHT..."
- IN FLAMES "Crawl Through Knives"
~coldfuzion:iconcoldfuzion: Jan 24, 2003, 12:24:34 PM
sad....really sad....arrr so beside this is a really nice writing... Heart
~drippingblood:icondrippingblood: Jan 24, 2003, 2:00:48 PM
I do love this, kind of sad, but I love sad poetry. but beautiful nonetheless i would like to see how this poem would be if you rewrote it.. or fixed it up. but i love ya Heart
~akashka:iconakashka: Jan 25, 2003, 8:37:40 AM
Jawdrop

ouch that hurts, thats so sad. but so beautiful written !

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Enter the realm...
~d-mon:icond-mon: Jan 25, 2003, 12:08:46 PM
this is beautiful, and i understand
err...wow

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"Satan represents man as just another animal, sometimes better, more often worse than those that walk on all-fours, who, because of his “divine spiritual and intellectual development,” has become the most vicious animal of all!"
~push-:iconpush-: Jan 26, 2003, 11:47:49 AM
this is beautiful caylee, and the way you described it with the emotion and feeling led a path straight to the understanding of the piece, just as ~d-mon said, you have a wonderful way with imagery and feeling in your poetry. I wanted to say thank you for all your beautiful comments on my work, and i'm sorry I haven't been able to catch up with everything. You're awesome, thank you. +fav

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and the earth bends to fill the void.
~justducks:iconjustducks: Jan 30, 2003, 1:16:00 AM
wow...that's awesome...it was beautiful and it's something i can relate to also, so it means more. very nice work. :D (Big Grin)